CaptainSpectacular Posted August 21, 2014 Share Posted August 21, 2014 A BLUE SKY A blue sky hangs above a man's head A man has seen much, he has done little A man lives alone, but is contented A feather falls from a bird A feather never touches the ground A feather floats only softly down A drop of water drips from a pipe A drop of water lands, falls slowly A drop of water finds its home A blue sky falls A man ducks his head A feather touches water A droplet breaks A man rises Blue and ShunGTX 2 Link to comment
Mike Posted August 21, 2014 Share Posted August 21, 2014 Again a very nice poem, keep up the good work! CaptainSpectacular 1 Link to comment
CaptainSpectacular Posted August 21, 2014 Author Share Posted August 21, 2014 Again a very nice poem, keep up the good work! You guys are adorable :3 Link to comment
ShunGTX Posted August 22, 2014 Share Posted August 22, 2014 Interesting peom, since blu is my fav color lol. Anyway good job! Link to comment
CaptainSpectacular Posted August 22, 2014 Author Share Posted August 22, 2014 At least this one isn't depressing :) Link to comment
Misfire33 Posted September 11, 2014 Share Posted September 11, 2014 Stop being good at poetry. It's not natural. I would edit one line, though; "A man has seen much, though he has done little" A small addition, nothing big. Just sounds better to me. Also, that basically describes most of the internet. CaptainSpectacular 1 Link to comment
Grampaaa Posted September 11, 2014 Share Posted September 11, 2014 Lol, I literally started writing poems because I enjoyed yours. CaptainSpectacular 1 Link to comment
CaptainSpectacular Posted September 11, 2014 Author Share Posted September 11, 2014 "A man has seen much, though he has done little" A small addition, nothing big. Just sounds better to me. Also, that basically describes most of the internet. Yeah, it's funny, I wrote this poem for the express purpose of having that line. After the surprising success of my other poem, I thought, "What if I wrote a super pretentious poem that people would dig to far into, like the ones in school?" And then, poof, here it was! I find it hilarious that so many people like this one as much as my other one xD Also, I wrote that line after watching The Big Lebowski for the first time in a few years xD EDIT: yeah, after reading over it again after about a month, good God, it is so pretentious... the quoting machine will show the ridiculous lines that rhyme by saying words like Yoda and other stuff I find terrible: A feather floats only softly down Eugh A drop of water lands, falls slowly This one in particular is really nasty A droplet breaks I said this because I had already said it landed, and it really shows xD Anyways, whatever, if you like it, you like it. And for that, I thank you :) Link to comment
Misfire33 Posted September 11, 2014 Share Posted September 11, 2014 I thought, "What if I wrote a super pretentious poem that people would dig to far into, like the ones in school?" Yeah, exactly. A poem that could mean literally anything, and probably means nothing; but you have to write a paper about it, so you just put down some hifalutin, pseudo-philosophical drivel and get an A+. I mean, yours is really good at sounding fancy without going on about bleeding roses. AKA the "angsty teenager technique." [spoiler]I think English Lit/AP English is just training for politics: attempt to pretend as convincingly as possible that you know what you're talking about.[/spoiler] Link to comment
CaptainSpectacular Posted September 11, 2014 Author Share Posted September 11, 2014 Yeah, exactly. A poem that could mean literally anything, and probably means nothing Completely, 100% on the nose what I was going for xD Link to comment
Misfire33 Posted September 11, 2014 Share Posted September 11, 2014 Completely, 100% on the nose what I was going for xD Yeah, I had to read a 700-page texbook about things like that. Thing weighed, like, 70 pounds AT LEAST. Link to comment
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