[Poem] Nameless Man

[xCloud]

An empty room
An empty frame
Nobody's home
There's nothing left

A packed duffelbag
Hat and shades
Worn out jacket
He wore as he went

A rainy storming day
Tears running down his face
As he walked down the road
Drenched and completely wet

An empty bridge
He looked over the rails
With eyes shut closed
He grabbed his chest

A single leap
A free fall
He felt nothing
Finally found some rest

[CaptainSpectacular]

A+ for making a poem that doesn't rhyme!  Seriously, there are very few people who have the guts to do that.

 

On the subject of the subject of the poem, I think it's very nicely done except for this stanza:

 

 

A packed duffelbag
Hat and shades
Worn out jacket
He wore as he went

To me it doesn't sound like it is on the same subject with the rest of the poem, but I've never been in that situation or really learned about it, so I don't know.

 

I think it's very nicely written, and I am a sucker for short poems, so overall I think you did a very good job and the poem is very touching as well :)

[xCloud]

A+ for making a poem that doesn't rhyme!  Seriously, there are very few people who have the guts to do that.

 

On the subject of the subject of the poem, I think it's very nicely done except for this stanza:

To me it doesn't sound like it is on the same subject with the rest of the poem, but I've never been in that situation or really learned about it, so I don't know.

 

I think it's very nicely written, and I am a sucker for short poems, so overall I think you did a very good job and the poem is very touching as well :)

 

This poem wasn't written in my usual style, still I like the way it came out.

[CaptainSpectacular]

This poem wasn't written in my usual style, still I like the way it came out.

Regardless, I think it looks and sounds very nice :)

[xCloud]

Regardless, I think it looks and sounds very nice :)

Hmm re-reading most of my poems, I noticed I never really put much attention whether it "rhymes" or not. I simply used words that sound alike. Surprisingly they would still come out pretty nice. I guess I just simply have my own writing style. 

 

This is poem is more like my usual poems

 

What is right
What is wrong
Why should i live
In this messed up world

I'm pathetic
I'm useless
I'm weak
I succumb to my weakness

I'm a failure
I'm dead weight
I'm nobody  
I'm a waste of space 

Why should I stay
Living this regret
I should die
And finally lay to rest

I'm good for nothing
No point in trying
I wont achieve anything
I even fail at dying

[CaptainSpectacular]

Why you so saaad ;-;

[Richie]

Why you so saaad ;-;

[Grampaaa]

It's like coles but it's the forums.

 

10/10 experience awaits you!~

[Akshit]

 

Why you so saaad ;-;